Wednesday, November 4, 2015

100 word challenge November

Walter, Bob and Siri loved mini cars. they asked their mom if they can go play with them and she allowed them. "let's go down the huge hill." "that may not be safe" but so they went down the hill but they went over a rock Bob flew off and was holding on with his bear hands. Bob said "I can smell people's food, i can see my siblings, I can feel wind blowing in my face, I could taste bugs  in my mouth, I can hear screaming parents." He jumped in the car, he was safe they never told their mom.

1 comment:

  1. Hey Michael,it's Brady. I like how you gave the characters names and used quotation marks. I think you should use commas to make your sentences shorter and use capitals at the start of sentences. Overall it is a great story! Good Job!